Beauty pageants for children can be in the range of 9-18 as they are still immature or they have not gone through puberty, this range of children is most likely to be force to join as a elementary scholars is most likely would not sign up by themselves. Most children are force to participate in beauty pageants by their parent and being force to do something is not helping the children to appreciate beauty, otherwise they might just have the opposite effect.
It is not true that children can appreciate beauty when take part in beauty pageants. Beauty can be in form of inner beauty , beauty of being natural, the beauty of scenery and even sexual desires is a form of beauty. Children that take part in beauty pageants have to gone through procedures to be actually qualify and be selected to be a contestant for beauty pageants, through this procedures the organizer had already limit the form of beauty. The beauty they had in mind for beauty pageants is the outer form of beauty, for example, beautiful and sexy for female and handsome for males, which both case is base on their looks and body. Other then that is called ugly for example, pimple on face is ugly, being fat is ugly. Also to be qualify there is a range of height and weight the contestant had to satisfy, hence there is a limits of the form of beauty. Thus, it is not true that children that take part in beauty pageants can appreciate what beauty is.
Beauty pageants is almost always associate with sexual desire for example, the sexiness, the seductiveness of body for females or muscular body for males. Children that had not gone through puberty do not know what sexual desire are and they do not have a perfect seductive body or muscular body, how could they participate when they had neither of the quality above. Above all this could be a form of indirect sexual harassment, have them wear indecent clothing and walk like a model showing their childish bodies in front of few thousands people , taking away their purity and innocents of a child. Hence, it is not true that children that take part in beauty pageants can appreciate what beauty is.
However, beauty pageants also had its own beauty that children can appreciate. They make sure to ask at least one profound question, for example, what you would like to do if you win this beauty pageants. Which is a typical question for almost all contest, with this children had to answer in a positive way and this make the beauty of human nature even though sometimes what they say does not come out of their hearts. In beauty pageants they had to choose the scenery that would go with the clothing, thus they could appreciate the beauty of nature. Hence, it is true that children take part in beauty pageants can appreciate what beauty is.
In overall, it is not true that children take part in beauty pageants can appreciate what beauty is. Although beauty pageants had its good I still think that children can not appreciate what beauty is by joining beauty pageants, they have to go through mental stress such as being stare at and at such a young age that have not gone through puberty they still do not know what sexual beauty is so is the outer beauty.
Caihu, I find some of this essay's content quite familiar. I think I must have mentioned them during our previous session. Certainly nothing wrong if you wish to adopt some of my ideas! :)
ReplyDeleteBut having said the above, despite that your essay sounds well thought-out, I am afraid that it is not as structured (or disciplined) as I hoped it would be. As it was for Edmund, the opening of your essay is superb. The beginning always starts off promising but the ending does not necessarily end in the blaze of glory one anticipates for. Why do I say that? Simply because the conclusion, though it matches and reinforces your stand/position, it does not quite "defeat" the opponent's argument -- in other words, the essay must always convince me (as the reader) that YOU are right. But I can only be persuaded that you are indeed right unless you have SHOWN or DEMONSTRATED to me that your opponent is wrong.
What you (and Edmund) did was rather mechanical. Disciplined and focussed is good, but mechanical and robotic is very bad. What the reader wants is a fluent, coherent piece of writing which can REASON and DEMONSTRATE that the author is correct. What you have given me is a series of points (they are good points, yes) but not necessarily interconnected with one another (where is the relation or relationship between these points?)
So the Introduction or opening of the essay, establishes the position and defines terms.
But the Conclusion or ending of the essay must literally WRAP UP the entire essay and give the reader the whole picture.